First essay

i'm pretty satisfy with the score for the first essay in ib psychology class.
i like the structure of essay in class because it gets to the point straight away. no need for attention device and the "waffle"...

we must be very careful about our word choice, because in psychology, we can't use words like "discover" "truth."

the essay question looks easy but when it comes to writing, its quite hard to come up with a "focused" "on topic" essay.